Why my school should have a canteen

WALT: write shorter persuasive post by making a claim and backing it up with reasons. I can plan for a longer persuasive post by identifying the topic, audience and genre. I can research my topic by a question, searching for sources, indentifying information and paragraphsing the facts.

 So in class we had to make a persuaive piece of writing and we had to make a topic up and my topic was we should have a canteen. I wrote about this topic because I just thought that we could use a canteen because it could be helpful for me and the school. It was kinda hard because I had to find the facts and try and put the facts into my own words, it was kinda of a work out for my brain because of the ideas that were popping out of my head and onto my screen. I was really close from giving up but I didn't and so I made this piece of writing.

We should have a canteen

 I believe this school should have a canteen because if kids are hungry or need something, there will be a canteen just sitting there waiting for them.

 But the question is where are we going to put the canteen? I say we should put it next to the staff room or maybe not the staff room maybe on the platform next to the hall, so if the teachers are hungry and they forget to bring their lunch, then they can just take a few steps and bam they are there getting themselves a coffee or a snack or to see how the students are going with their new job at the canteen! 

If the kids can’t bring money to school then we will do something for the kids to buy something, for example this kid from this school could do very well and if he was lucky enough he could get a special token, the token is to buy stuff like food or drinks or even something healthy for snack break, but adults can use their money because they are allowed. If we can’t find adult workers then we can ask kids if they would like to volunteer to work for the canteen.

 The things that will be put into the canteen will be like an even amount of treat food and drinks but also lots of healthy things like drinks and food so then the kids can stay healthy and strong and also the teachers. The drinks could be anything like a healthy drink or a little bit of a sugar drink or a coffee, the coffee can be anything you want it to be like black or white latte and more, we want the teachers happy and we know they love their coffee!

 We need healthy things in our canteen because in New Zealand kids are eating too much junk food and it is making kids build up skin. We need to stay healthy so we can live longer and eat healthier throughout your whole life.

Descritive writing

WALT:
- Use paragraphas to ink similar ideas together
- Write in structure, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
- use linking words pharases to link paragraphs for effects

 In class we had to descripe a man who was sitting in a dark room. So we had to use the five sences to make a paragraph. We drafted before we wrote. When I was writing this text it was really hard because you had to describe the man by using the five sences.

As the man was sitting in a cold damp room the only thing he could see was darkness when he looked out the window he saw people having a great time that was when he started to cry, so he closed his eyes and he saw nothing and that was the reason he was crying because he has nothing to care about. He kept his eyelids shut until he fell asleep.

 Once he awoke he started to remember his past why he is here in this room. It was 1999 he was in prison for 4 years until he broke out but he forgot something of course his mates he would never leave them behind, well he did but only for 3 years. The reason why is because he was making a master plan an undercover cop trying to get his mates out of prison