WALT: Use descriptive language
In class we have been reading this book, the title was the ANZAC violin it was about this man his name was Alexander Aitken, he was carrying around this violin through out his hole time in the war. After we had read the book our teacher said to us to go and make a diary entry for one of the parts in the book, so what we did on the first day was we created a attrbutes charts for our writing. then later on we started to create our diary entries. The part I chose in the book was when he was laying down wounded, that stood out for me because I thought it could be really good for a diary entry. Something that was easy about this writing was getting ideas and putting them into my diary entry. But something that was difficult about doing this diary was thinking of ideas because I had trouble thinking of some more ideas.
As I lay wounded, the sounds of gunfire surround me as I quickly crawl to the trench. As I lay down in the dusty trench, blood starts gushing out of my clothes and as I’m screaming I start to hear commands to fire or move, as the commands get called a bomb blows off nears us after 10 minutes or so I start to open my eyes and as I open them my vision gets blurry but as I’m looking around I see comrades on the ground dead. As I struggle to get up shots are flying past me and hitting the dirt, I start to limp I struggle
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